Each year, Amazon hosts a contest for the Breakthrough Novel of the year. I have decided to enter the contest. But, before I can do that, I need to polish up a pitch for my book. That is where you come in. I have a rough draft written up. What I need to know from you is what you think of it. For those of you who have read A Mighty Fortress, does the pitch describe the book accurately and well without giving too much away? For those of you who have not read the book, does the pitch make you want to read more? For everybody, is there a word missing, a sentence that needs to be reworded, or something else that doesn’t seem quite right?
I’ll be honest right up front. I think that the hardest thing that an author can do, is try to describe his or her own book. There are so many details that we think should be included, but in reality, they aren’t necessary. So, any help you can give would be greatly appreciated. Thank you!!
Here is the pitch:
Joshua is an adventurous seventeen year old. Jed is an angry young outlaw. Two young men. Two different backgrounds. Two different paths. Both live in the Wild West where one split-second decision could cost you your life or make you a hero. Both Jed and Joshua have this moment when they meet each other, not just once, but twice.
The first meeting is at a stagecoach robbery. Jed is one of the robbers and Joshua and his younger sister are the only passengers. After some talk and many gunshots, Jed, Joshua, and Ruth are the only people not hurt or killed. Not wanting to leave any witnesses to the melee, Jed pursues the siblings into the wilderness. Joshua and Ruth barely escape with their lives and finally meet up with their parents at their new horse ranch.
Jed continues living the outlaw life all the while searching for the two kids who ruined his life. Joshua helps his father raise horses and gets involved in the town as deputy sheriff. Two years later, the outlaw and the new sheriff meet again, this time with very different results.
A Mighty Fortress is a young adult Christian Western novel full of adventure, life lessons, and encouragement to lean on God as your fortress in every situation.